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Huck's avatar

[cover image: scene from Fritz Lang's Metropolis]

Dorian Gage Miller's avatar

Breathtaking.

Huck's avatar

glad it resonated for you

Poems & Prayers's avatar

I felt the big bang to the second coming, great. But, if I get a vote, read it yourself. That AI voice is terrible.

Huck's avatar

oh do ppl actually listen to that automated voice? yikes

Poems & Prayers's avatar

Not for long. It so clearly ha no comprehension or feel for the language. I assumed it was done on purpose.

Huck's avatar

it's fatal flaw is that it doesn't understand what a line-break is or how it works. that's death for poetry

Poems & Prayers's avatar

100%! Of course, most readers don't understand them either.

Daniel Bishop's avatar

I tried looking for an option to turn off the AI voiceover on posts, but I couldn't find one. Which is frustrating, because as your comment illustrates, people assume we are choosing to have the AI voiceover.

Poems & Prayers's avatar

How strange. I haven't experienced that yet.

Huck's avatar

yeah, I searched the help function and it basically said there is no off-switch. ridiculous

Crystal's avatar

Incredible::…

Huck's avatar

glad you think so - thanks for reading

John McKeown's avatar

I like the, correct me if I'm wrong, Gnostic flavour to this poem. Casually cosmic, and more than faintly erotic (thank you officer I'll come quietly, cuff me now), those 'pale white hands.' The perfect poem for a hot, wine-washed afternoon.

Huck's avatar

thanks john! somewhat gnostic for sure - depending on whose version of genesis you believe...

Jeanne Vessantra's avatar

This felt like a cosmic journey suspended between reality and the spiritual world.